Peer Evaluation - Audience Feedback

We recently showed our first draft of our film to a select group of friends and teachers. We received mixed comments however most were negative. There were certain parts of the film that people really liked, I.e. certain camera shots and action sequences. But we received lots of criticism on a lot of things. Mise en Scene was a big problem for us as we had not put our research together properly and had used the wrong type of location for our genre. We hadn't payed enough attention to our audience research. We also received some harsh criticism on certain actors and their un-convincing performance (which again didn't appropriately fit the Genre and style of film we had hoped to achieve). We have however taken alot of the major mistakes under reconsideration. In the final copy of our film we hope that we can deliver an excellent viewing experience to anyone watching.

Location - Industrial

This is the kind of location we hope to use. It is simple but is dark and gloomy and suites the Genre and narrative of our film. We have located a nearby site that we can use for the main part of our opening scene.






Although many people will just see this style of location as a boring and lifeless one they are key to the Iconography of our film. The gritty Industrial estate is a classic and iconic location in many Crime (Gangster) films.

Audience Research

Genre of our Film : Crime, Action

We want to give our audience a non stop action filled film opening that they will remember for a long, long time. Most actions film openings are very memorable in their own special way. This is key to grabbing the audiences  attention and giving them the incentive to watch the rest of the film. We want to make the intro quick and snappy but without losing the necessary detail to set the narrative of the film. We had to change certain aspects of our film from the original draft. These things included setting, actors and Dialogue. The Dialogue was a problem as it included language only suitable to that of an 18 age certificate. We discovered that a lot of block buster action films are usually within the 12/12a to 15 range of certificate. So taking this into consideration and changing some of the key governing factors seemed like the best option.

Sound Analysis

Music: We wanted to use about 30 seconds worth of a song from youtube. However we don't own or have the rights to exhibit the chosen piece of music without permission from the record company. I assumed this would not be without its difficulties so instead we have opted for about 10 seconds of audio from the song as this is allowed for use in our film. We have also researched a number of different web sites that offer royalty free mp3 tracks for use in films or videos.

SFX: We have acquired a full array of different sounds for use in our film. We have listed all needed SFX for each part of the film. This includes anything from explosions and gunshots to cracks in glass and brutal punches.

Here is a list of SFX we need

Swish (Varied)  - for use in video transitions and in opening credits

Gunshots - Pistol, Rifle, Sub-Machine Gun. Mainly used in action scenes

Glass - Smashing and breaking effects. 

Drums and Percussion - to build tension. The use of deep bass sounds is often used in Action films to build suspense and give the scene a slightly more energetic feel. Also High pitch - quick and sharp sounds to add a change in direction to the scene. Sudden sounds that alert the viewer to the situation and any changes it undergoes.

We are still in the process of finalising all SFX

What we are planning. (Action Plan)

I am currently working on finishing the script along side my colleague Georgie Watson. I have also been planning in advance the set and location. The Storyboard is complete and will be posted within the next few days.

Georgie (Cinematographer) is currently looking into budget for props and other necessities that are needed for filming.

Ellis 'H' Snell (video/effects editor) is currently researching into Special Effects needed for the Action sequence. This includes: Blood effects, Smoke and other effects including realistic damage to the set and background

Ed (sound editor) is currently looking into a variety of different sounds needed including: SFX such as Gunshots etc. He is also researching a soundtrack and both Diegetic and Non-Diegetic sound.

Script Rough - Not yet Finished

The Last Man Standing.    Swift Getaway Productions

This is the main dialogue scene...the majority of the film is based around an action sequence.

Starring:

Georgie Watson: Jimmy 'JJ' Jones

Joe Haddow: Joseph 'The Bear' Bayter

Ellis Snell: Hernay Kapala 'Ghost'

Ed Stow: Big Eddy

Lawrence Hart: Antonio Frebarro 'Toni'

Jack Barber: Jackie B

plus many more...

Script:

(Ambient discussion) - In the background of the setting.

Narration:

Close up of Eddys name tag, which then pans out to him carrying a tray,wearing a waiters outfit (black suit, bow tie etc.....etc. 

Eddy then turns around to walk across the bar.

Extra: Hey Eddy, get yourself something nice from me.

Extra: Hey watch it! ..oh its you Edd. - Edd is carrying tray of drinks.

(background chatter)

Introduction to each character - Screen shot of each person.

Eddy: Whispers into Jackie B's ear (creates mystery)

Group at the card table (Joseph, Jimmy etc.): Eddy!! Get over here

Joseph: Yeah Eddy can you get us, ehh... just get us the usual ...oh and charge it to my tab.

Jimmy: You're too kind (laughing sarcastically)

Joseph: Ahh quit busting my balls.. (laughing)

Jackie: Stick or Twist Hernay?

Hernay: Ehhh Twist please..

Jackie: Certainly Sir..(laughing)

Hernay: You fucking joker.

Jackie: What you doing Joe?

Joseph: Just sorting my shoe - the camera catches a glimpse of a gun Joe has holstered around his ankle.

Jackie B: So what you doing?

Joe: I'll Stick

Jimmy: Stick? haha Alright there ya blouse   (laughing)

Joe: Haha..you should see my hand

Jackie: And you H?

H: I'm pretty good...so I'll stick.

Jackie: Yeah whatever

Eddy enters with drinks tray.

Hernay: Finally Edd...jeez whats with you today

Edd: Just cant beleive you guys can forget about it so quickly.

Joe: Forget about what?

Jimmy: Yeah What?

Edd: About the Job that we pulled the other day...You know the one that went wrong!

Hernay: Woah..Woah calm down!

Jimmy: Yeah ..lets not make a scene.

Ant enters

Ant: Make a scene..what in this place! Ahhhaaaa (laughing)

Joe: Toni my friend...just how are you doing?

Group: Hey..

Ant: Im good thankyou.

Hernay: Then sit down, have a drink

Ant: You know what...maybe I will. Infact Jackie deal me in.

Jackie: Sure sir

Ant: Please... (reassures Jackie)

Joe: So Toni

Ant: JJ, hows the mrs? (Grinning mysteriously)

Jimmy: Guys,Guys....shes fine ;) (laughing sarcastically, looks around for attention)*group laughs*

Joe: I bet she is!

Hernay: Hey edd, pass me that brandy.

Edd: right away buddy.

Hernay: oh and one of those fine cigars

(Ed passes the cigar over and as hernay creeps up to recieve it the camera catches a gun strapped to his waist)

[Rest of the group Laugh]

Name Change

We have discussed and have decided to change our production company name from 'Pizza Planet Productions'
to 'Swift Getaway'  because it seems more relevant to our chosen genre.

Here are the following titles (members) of Swift Getaway:

Joe Haddow: Director/ Director of photography/Producer
Georgie Watson: Cinematographer/Producer
Ellis Snell: Editor (video)
Ed Stow: Editor (sound)

Company stock will be available soon...